A
reason behind websites that fail is
the lack of an effective direct response
sales message that's comprised of
three things: it must be
1) captivating,
2) riveting and
3) engaging.
How
can you incorporate those three elements?
First, write to be scanned. On the
Internet, people are fast-paced, click-happy
and easily bored. Break your copy
into small paragraphs and lace your
copy with many headers with one at
every two to three paragraphs.
But
once you've captured your readers'
attention, the next step is to keep
them reading the copy. Your job is
to not only generate interest but
also maintain it. The latter is a
much harder task.
The
debate about long versus short copy
is an old one. While long copy is
statistically proven to outperform
short copy, many of my clients still
say that long copy will never be read
on the web, and that things online
are short and fast. I fervently protest.
Sure,
things are short and fast online.
But there is a difference between
grabbing people's attention and holding
on to it. Keeping readers riveted,
hanging on to every word with an intense
desire to discover what's next, is
the goal of any direct response copy.
(It
sounds the same as reading a story,
right? Well, it is.)
Prospects
who are genuinely interested in the
product you offer always want more
information about it, not less. If
they are not qualified, no matter
how long or short the copy is they
will just never buy. They won't read
15 words, much less 1,500 words.
In
my experience, short copy can often
result in:
1)
a lower response rate due to the lack
of information;
2) a barrage of questions
from confused or undecided prospects;
or
3) a higher level
of returns since the product failed
to meet expectations.
If
long copy yields poor results, it
has to do with the copy and not the
length. It's too boring. It didn't
elevate the reader's level of interest,
and it failed to keep her reading.
Of
course, writing long copy that engages,
entices and entertains the reader
is very difficult. (That's why people
hire copywriters like me.) But when
it is good, then the reader hangs
onto every word and becomes increasingly
excited the further she reads it.
Copywriters
are storytellers. If your copy tells
a compelling story, people will read
it. All of it. To illustrate, one
day you notice a book at your local
bookstore. The cover, title and cover
copy pull you into the book. The opening
chapter is delectable.
So,
you decide to buy the book.
The
book is inviting, and the story compels
you to read every single page, no
matter how big the book is. In fact,
the book is so good that you either
wish it was bigger or, once finished,
are prepared to read it over once
more. You just can't put it down.
But
as you read it further, you become
confused and slowly begin to lose
interest. The plot no longer invites
you to keep reading. You drift away
and find it harder to continue. Ultimately,
you stop, close the book and then
shelve it. Copy is no different.
With
a riveting story, the reader becomes
intimately involved in the plot. They
see themselves in the shoes of the
characters. To do this, you need what
I call "UPWORDS," which
is an acronym for: "Universal
picture words or relatable, descriptive
sentences."
"Universal
picture words" means mental imagery
that help to paint vivid pictures
in the mind. Lace your copy with words
that engage as many of the senses
as possible, and cause prospects to
easily visualize already enjoying
the benefits of your offer.
"Universal"
means to appeal to your audience as
a whole. Readers must not only read
your copy but also understand, internalize
and appreciate it. Remember: different
words mean different things to different
people. So, use words that can help
your message to be interpreted in
the same way by the bulk of your readers.
For
example, in an effort to explain the
importance of initial consultations
to their patients, surgeons use analogies,
such as: "Like a dentist, I can't
give consultations to you over the
phone without any x-rays of your teeth
and knowing how many cavities you
have."
Similarly,
use analogies, metaphors and examples,
including case scenarios. In short,
use a language to which prospects
can relate and with which they can
visualize what you're trying to describe.
Finally,
tell your readers what to do. Be active,
not passive. Use action words and
active verbs that paint vivid pictures
in the mind, too. The more vivid the
picture is, the more compelling your
request will be. Don't be afraid to
pull out your Thesaurus!
For
example, you're a financial consultant.
Rather than, "Poor fiscal management
leads to financial woes," say,
"stop mediocre money management
from sucking cash straight out of
your wallet!"
People
can visualize the action of "sucking"
better than they can "leading."
Here's another example. Instead of,
"Let me consult you on how to
maintain your balance sheet,"
say, "borrow my eyes to help
you keep a steady finger on your financial
pulse."